{"id":21,"date":"2025-07-24T00:52:52","date_gmt":"2025-07-24T00:52:52","guid":{"rendered":"https:\/\/ieltswritingguru.com\/?page_id=21"},"modified":"2025-08-11T00:43:31","modified_gmt":"2025-08-11T00:43:31","slug":"ielts-task2-sample-essay-feedback","status":"publish","type":"page","link":"https:\/\/ieltswritingguru.com\/zh\/ielts-task2-sample-essay-feedback\/","title":{"rendered":"Sample feedback"},"content":{"rendered":"<h1 class=\"wp-block-heading\"><code>IELTS Writing Task 2 Samples \u2013 Band 5, 6, 8 with Real Feedback<\/code><\/h1>\n\n\n\n<p>Looking for real IELTS Writing Task 2 samples with band scores and expert feedback? On this page, you&#8217;ll find three essays written by candidates at different levels \u2014 Band 5, Band 6, and Band 7.5. Each includes tutor feedback from Bruno, Carmen, or Alan, helping you see exactly what examiners look for at each level.<\/p>\n\n\n\n<style>\n  :root{\n    --ielts-card:#11162b; --ielts-card-2:#0d1330; --ielts-text:#e8ecff;\n    --ielts-muted:#b6c0ff; --ielts-accent:#7aa2ff; --ielts-chip:#1a2348;\n    --ielts-border:rgba(122,162,255,.25);\n  }\n  @media (prefers-color-scheme: light){\n    :root{ --ielts-card:#ffffff; --ielts-card-2:#f3f6ff; --ielts-text:#101222;\n      --ielts-muted:#3b4a7a; --ielts-accent:#2b5cff; --ielts-chip:#e9eeff;\n      --ielts-border:rgba(43,92,255,.15); }\n  }\n  .ielts-essay{font-family: system-ui,-apple-system,Segoe UI,Roboto,Inter,Ubuntu,Arial;\n    color:var(--ielts-text); background:var(--ielts-card); border:1px solid var(--ielts-border);\n    border-radius:18px; overflow:hidden; box-shadow:0 12px 30px rgba(0,0,0,.25); margin:22px 0}\n  .ielts-head{padding:22px 22px 12px; background:linear-gradient(180deg,var(--ielts-card-2),transparent)}\n  .ielts-kicker{font-size:12px; letter-spacing:.12em; text-transform:uppercase; color:var(--ielts-muted)}\n  .ielts-title{margin:.2rem 0 .4rem; font-size:20px; font-weight:700}\n  .ielts-meta{display:flex; flex-wrap:wrap; gap:10px; padding:0 22px 14px}\n  .ielts-meta .item{font-size:13px; color:var(--ielts-muted)} .ielts-meta b{color:var(--ielts-text)}\n  .ielts-toolbar{display:flex; gap:10px; align-items:center; padding:14px 22px;\n    border-top:1px dashed var(--ielts-border); border-bottom:1px dashed var(--ielts-border);\n    background:var(--ielts-card-2)}\n  .ielts-btn{appearance:none; border:1px solid var(--ielts-border); background:var(--ielts-chip);\n    color:var(--ielts-text); padding:8px 12px; border-radius:10px; font-size:13px; cursor:pointer}\n  .ielts-btn:hover{transform:translateY(-1px)} .ielts-btn[aria-pressed=\"true\"]{outline:2px solid var(--ielts-accent)}\n  .ielts-body{padding:18px 22px}\n  .ielts-section{margin:0 0 18px} .ielts-section h4{margin:0 0 8px; font-size:14px; color:var(--ielts-muted);\n    text-transform:uppercase; letter-spacing:.08em}\n  .ielts-quote{border-left:3px solid var(--ielts-accent); padding-left:12px}\n  .ielts-response{max-height:280px; overflow:hidden; position:relative}\n  .ielts-response.expanded{max-height:none}\n  .ielts-fade{content:\"\"; position:absolute; left:0; right:0; bottom:0; height:60px;\n    background:linear-gradient(180deg, rgba(0,0,0,0), var(--ielts-card)); display:block}\n  .ielts-response.expanded .ielts-fade{display:none}\n  .ielts-foot{display:flex; justify-content:space-between; align-items:center; gap:12px;\n    padding:12px 22px 18px}\n  .ielts-pill{font-size:12px; background:var(--ielts-chip); padding:6px 10px; border-radius:999px;\n    border:1px solid var(--ielts-border)}\n  .ielts-pill.good{border-color:rgba(34,197,94,.3)} .ielts-pill.warn{border-color:rgba(251,191,36,.35)}\n  .ielts-mono{font-family: ui-monospace, SFMono-Regular, Menlo, Monaco, Consolas, \"Liberation Mono\", monospace; font-size:12px}\n  .ielts-hr{border:none; border-top:1px solid var(--ielts-border); margin:12px 0}\n<\/style>\n\n<div class=\"ielts-essay\" id=\"ielts-essay-bruno\">\n  <div class=\"ielts-head\">\n    <div class=\"ielts-kicker\">Essay question<\/div>\n    <h3 class=\"ielts-title\">Interviews form the basic selecting criteria for most large companies. However, some people think that the interview is not a reliable method of choosing whom to employ. To what extent do you <strong>agree or disagree<\/strong>?<\/h3>\n  <\/div>\n\n  <div class=\"ielts-meta\">\n    <div class=\"item\">User goal: <b>Band 6.0<\/b><\/div>\n    <div class=\"item\">Estimated level: <b>Band 5.0<\/b><\/div>\n    <div class=\"item\">Length: <b>134 words<\/b><\/div>\n  <\/div>\n\n  <div class=\"ielts-toolbar\" role=\"toolbar\" aria-label=\"Essay tools\">\n    <button class=\"ielts-btn\" data-action=\"copy\">Copy essay<\/button>\n    <button class=\"ielts-btn\" data-action=\"download\">Download .txt<\/button>\n    <button class=\"ielts-btn\" data-action=\"toggle\" aria-pressed=\"false\">Expand<\/button>\n    <span class=\"ielts-mono\" aria-live=\"polite\" id=\"msg-bruno\"><\/span>\n  <\/div>\n\n  <div class=\"ielts-body\">\n    <div class=\"ielts-section\">\n      <h4>Candidate response<\/h4>\n      <div class=\"ielts-response\" id=\"resp-bruno\">\n        <div class=\"ielts-quote\" id=\"text-bruno\">\n          <p>Interview is the main way for big companies to hire new worker. But many people think this not good way to choose the worker. I think interview is not always good.<\/p>\n          <p>When people go to interview, they feel nervous and cannot show real self. This is big problem. Maybe they forget answer or speak bad English. But maybe they are very smart in the job. So interview not always fair.<\/p>\n          <p>Also some people good at talking but not good at working. They say good thing in interview, but after get job, not work good. So company make mistake.<\/p>\n          <p>Company should do more thing like test or see CV or give small job first. Then they can know better.<\/p>\n          <p>So I don\u2019t think interview is best way. 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You often just start a new sentence without a clear connector.\n      Try using linkers like \u201cFor example,\u201d or \u201cAs a result,\u201d to guide the reader.\n    <\/p>\n  <\/div>\n\n  <div class=\"card green\">\n    <div class=\"title-sm\">Lexical Resource \u2014 Band 5<\/div>\n    <p class=\"muted small\">\n      Your vocabulary is simple and repeated. To improve, try: \u201cbig companies \u2192 large corporations,\u201d\n      \u201cgood at working \u2192 competent,\u201d \u201csmall job \u2192 trial task.\u201d\n    <\/p>\n  <\/div>\n\n  <div class=\"card red\">\n    <div class=\"title-sm\">Grammar \u2014 Band 5<\/div>\n    <p class=\"muted small\">\n      Frequent errors with articles, verb forms, and plurals make your writing less accurate.\n      Work on sentence structure and subject\u2013verb agreement.\n    <\/p>\n    <p class=\"small\"><em>Original:<\/em> \u201cInterview is the main way for big companies to hire new worker.\u201d \u2014\n      <em>Corrected:<\/em> \u201c<strong>An interview<\/strong> is the main way for big companies to hire new <strong>workers<\/strong>.\u201d\n      \u2014 Added article \u201cAn\u201d and plural \u201cworkers\u201d for accuracy.\n    <\/p>\n  <\/div>\n\n  <div class=\"card dashed\">\n    <div class=\"title-sm\">Quick Tips for Your Next Essay<\/div>\n    <ul class=\"small muted\" style=\"margin:6px 0 0 18px\">\n      <li>Explain each idea with an example<\/li>\n      <li>Use more linking words<\/li>\n      <li>Vary your vocabulary<\/li>\n      <li>Check articles and plurals<\/li>\n      <li>Write at least 250 words<\/li>\n    <\/ul>\n  <\/div>\n\n  <div class=\"card plain\">\n    <div class=\"title-sm\">Overall: Band 5.0<\/div>\n  <\/div>\n\n  <div class=\"card blue\">\n    <div class=\"title-sm\">Final Word<\/div>\n    <p class=\"small muted\" style=\"margin:6px 0 0\">\n      Your strength is that you answered the question and kept your ideas clear. The main issues are underdeveloped ideas and grammar mistakes,\n      especially with articles and plurals. Next time, aim to give one example for each main point and link your ideas more smoothly.\n      Also, expand your vocabulary to avoid repeating basic words. Keep practising with full 250+ word essays \u2014 this will give you more space\n      to explain your ideas and reach a higher band.\n    <\/p>\n    <p class=\"small muted\" style=\"margin:10px 0 0\"><em>\u2014 Bruno, your IELTS Writing Mentor (v4.0)<\/em><\/p>\n  <\/div>\n\n  <!-- Watermark overlay -->\n  <div class=\"wm-overlay\" aria-hidden=\"true\"><\/div>\n<\/div>\n\n\n\n<p>Want feedback like this for your writing? 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Introduce topic-specific vocabulary for government funding and the arts to demonstrate range and accuracy.<\/p>\n    <\/div>\n\n    <!-- GRA card -->\n    <div style=\"border:1px solid #c3e6e3; padding:14px 16px; border-radius:12px; margin-bottom:14px; background:#ffffff;\">\n      <div style=\"font-weight:700; color:#0b7261; margin-bottom:8px;\">\u270d\ufe0f Grammatical Range &#038; Accuracy \u2014 Band 6 (Competent)<\/div>\n      <p style=\"margin:0 0 6px 0;\">Sentence structures are mostly simple with occasional complex sentences. Errors are minor but noticeable (e.g., missing articles, awkward phrasing). Increasing the range of complex sentence types \u2014 such as concessive clauses (\u201cWhile some may argue\u2026\u201d) or conditional structures (\u201cIf governments were to fund the arts\u2026\u201d) \u2014 would help achieve a higher band.<\/p>\n      <p style=\"margin:0 0 6px 0;\"><strong>Original:<\/strong> \u201cSome people think government should pay money to artists\u2026\u201d \u2192 <strong>Corrected:<\/strong> \u201cSome people think the government should provide financial support to artists\u2026\u201d (adds article and formal tone)<\/p>\n      <p style=\"margin:0;\"><strong>Original:<\/strong> \u201cThey think it is not fair to other workers or people in need.\u201d \u2192 <strong>Corrected:<\/strong> \u201cThey argue that such funding may be inequitable to other professions or vulnerable groups.\u201d (more precise and formal)<\/p>\n    <\/div>\n\n    <!-- Quick Wins Plan -->\n    <div style=\"border:1px solid #d8efe3; background:#f4fff4; padding:14px 16px; border-radius:12px; margin-bottom:14px;\">\n      <div style=\"display:flex; align-items:center; gap:8px; margin-bottom:8px;\">\n        <div style=\"font-weight:700; color:#0b7261;\">7-Day Quick Wins to Push Toward Band 7+<\/div>\n        <div style=\"margin-left:auto; font-size:12px; color:#0b7261; background:#e8fbf0; border:1px solid #c9f4dc; padding:3px 8px; border-radius:999px;\">Quick Wins<\/div>\n      <\/div>\n      <div style=\"display:grid; grid-template-columns:repeat(7,1fr); gap:6px;\">\n        <div style=\"border:1px solid #e0f2e9; border-radius:10px; padding:8px; font-size:12px;\"><strong>Mon<\/strong><br>Expand one example with statistics or research<\/div>\n        <div style=\"border:1px solid #e0f2e9; border-radius:10px; padding:8px; font-size:12px;\"><strong>Tue<\/strong><br>Replace 3 informal phrases with academic terms<\/div>\n        <div style=\"border:1px solid #e0f2e9; border-radius:10px; padding:8px; font-size:12px;\"><strong>Wed<\/strong><br>Write 2 conditional sentences about funding policies<\/div>\n        <div style=\"border:1px solid #e0f2e9; border-radius:10px; padding:8px; font-size:12px;\"><strong>Thu<\/strong><br>Use \u201cNonetheless\u201d or \u201cIn contrast\u201d in a paragraph<\/div>\n        <div style=\"border:1px solid #e0f2e9; border-radius:10px; padding:8px; font-size:12px;\"><strong>Fri<\/strong><br>Add one cause-effect sentence to a past essay<\/div>\n        <div style=\"border:1px solid #e0f2e9; border-radius:10px; padding:8px; font-size:12px;\"><strong>Sat<\/strong><br>Practice synonyms for \u201csupport\u201d and \u201cmoney\u201d<\/div>\n        <div style=\"border:1px solid #e0f2e9; border-radius:10px; padding:8px; font-size:12px;\"><strong>Sun<\/strong><br>Revise this essay with stronger linking phrases<\/div>\n      <\/div>\n    <\/div>\n\n    <!-- Model Sentence -->\n    <div style=\"border:1px solid #c3e6e3; padding:14px 16px; border-radius:12px; margin-bottom:16px; background:#ffffff;\">\n      <div style=\"font-weight:700; color:#0b7261; margin-bottom:8px;\">\ud83d\udcdd Model Sentence Rewrite<\/div>\n      <p style=\"margin:0;\"><strong>Original:<\/strong> \u201cArt, music, and poems help people express feelings and learn about their culture.\u201d<br>\n      <strong>Improved:<\/strong> \u201cArt, music, and literature foster emotional expression and promote cultural awareness, enriching both individual lives and collective identity.\u201d<br>\n      <span style=\"color:#607089;\"><em>Why it\u2019s better:<\/em> Uses formal vocabulary, varied structure, and academic tone.<\/span><\/p>\n    <\/div>\n\n    <!-- Final Word -->\n    <div style=\"border:1px solid #bcd4ff; background:#eef6ff; padding:14px 16px; border-radius:12px; margin-bottom:10px;\">\n      <div style=\"font-weight:700; color:#143e86; margin-bottom:6px;\">\ud83d\udcac Final Word<\/div>\n      <p style=\"margin:0;\">You have a clear understanding of the topic and can present both perspectives with balance. 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There is no doubt that global fashion has become a strong influence on people\u2019s lives. In this essay, I will explain the reasons behind this trend and discuss whether it is a positive or negative development.<\/p>\n          <p>The rise of the internet and social media is one of the most important factors that make global fashion so influential. In the past, people only knew about local styles, but now, they can easily watch videos, see photos, and read news from all over the world. Many celebrities and fashion bloggers share their clothes and opinions online, which attracts a lot of attention from young people. In addition, the development of global trade allows people to buy clothes from foreign brands easily and at a cheaper price than before.<\/p>\n          <p>In my opinion, I think this trend has both good and bad sides. On the one hand, it allows people to express themselves more freely and try different styles from different cultures. 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Feedback for a high-band essay<\/div>\n  <\/div>\n\n  <!-- Your full Alan content, unchanged -->\n  <div class=\"fb-body\">\n    <div style=\"font-family:-apple-system,BlinkMacSystemFont,'Segoe UI',Roboto,Helvetica,Arial; color:#111827; line-height:1.52; max-width:880px; margin:0 auto;\">\n      <!-- Header -->\n      <div style=\"position:relative; padding:16px 18px; border-radius:14px; margin:16px 0 18px; background:linear-gradient(135deg,#eef6ff 0%,#f4fff4 100%); border:1px solid #dfeaf7;\">\n        <div style=\"display:flex; align-items:center; gap:12px;\">\n          <div style=\"font-weight:800; font-size:20px; letter-spacing:.2px; color:#143e86;\">Alan \u2014 IELTS Task 2 Feedback<\/div>\n          <div style=\"margin-left:auto; display:flex; gap:8px; align-items:center;\">\n            <span style=\"font-size:13px; background:#fff5e5; color:#8a5200; padding:4px 10px; border-radius:999px; border:1px solid #ffe3b3;\">Target: Band 8.0<\/span>\n            <span style=\"font-size:13px; 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padding:16px; border-radius:12px; background:#fbfdff; margin-bottom:18px;\">\n        <h3 style=\"margin:0 0 8px 0; color:#143e86;\">\ud83d\udd27 Corrections (Grammar &#038; Vocabulary Mark-Up)<\/h3>\n        <p style=\"font-size:13px; color:#607089; margin:0 0 12px 0;\">Inline fixes appear in <span style=\"color:#0b7261; font-weight:700;\">green<\/span> after a <span style=\"color:#9b1c1c; text-decoration:line-through; font-weight:700;\">strike-through<\/span>. Superscripts refer to brief explanations below.<\/p>\n        <p style=\"margin:0; line-height:1.6;\">\n          <span>Nowadays, <s>more and more<\/s><span style=\"color:#0b7261; font-weight:700;\">increasing numbers of<\/span><sup style=\"color:#1b6fd1;\">1<\/sup> people are following global fashion trends, which can be seen from the way they dress. There is no doubt that global fashion has become a strong influence on people\u2019s lives. In this essay, I will explain the reasons behind this trend and discuss whether it is a positive or negative development.<\/span>\n          <br><br>\n          <span>The rise of the internet and social media is one of the most important factors that <s>make<\/s><span style=\"color:#0b7261; font-weight:700;\">makes<\/span><sup style=\"color:#1b6fd1;\">2<\/sup> global fashion so influential. In the past, people only knew about local styles, but <s>now,<\/s><span style=\"color:#0b7261; font-weight:700;\">now<\/span><sup style=\"color:#1b6fd1;\">3<\/sup> they can easily watch videos, see photos, and read news from all over the world. Many celebrities and fashion bloggers share their clothes and opinions online, which attracts a lot of attention from young people. In addition, the development of global trade allows people to buy clothes from foreign brands easily and at <s>a cheaper price<\/s><span style=\"color:#0b7261; font-weight:700;\">lower prices<\/span><sup style=\"color:#1b6fd1;\">4<\/sup> than before.<\/span>\n          <br><br>\n          <span><s>In my opinion, I think<\/s><span style=\"color:#0b7261; font-weight:700;\">In my opinion,<\/span><sup style=\"color:#1b6fd1;\">5<\/sup> this trend has both good and bad sides. On the one hand, it allows people to express themselves more freely and try different styles from different cultures. This can increase their confidence and creativity. Also, it helps countries to understand each other better by sharing fashion and culture. However, <s>on the other hand,<\/s><span style=\"color:#0b7261; font-weight:700;\">on the other hand<\/span><sup style=\"color:#1b6fd1;\">6<\/sup>, it can cause people to forget their traditional clothing and values. Especially for <s>young generation<\/s><span style=\"color:#0b7261; font-weight:700;\">the younger generation<\/span><sup style=\"color:#1b6fd1;\">7<\/sup>, they may care too much about appearance and ignore what is more important <s>inside<\/s><span style=\"color:#0b7261; font-weight:700;\">in life<\/span><sup style=\"color:#1b6fd1;\">8<\/sup>. Also, not everyone can afford to buy new clothes all the time, which may lead to comparison and pressure.<\/span>\n          <br><br>\n          <span>In conclusion, global fashion <s>becomes<\/s><span style=\"color:#0b7261; font-weight:700;\">is becoming<\/span><sup style=\"color:#1b6fd1;\">9<\/sup> more and more powerful because of online influence and easier shopping. I believe it has both positive and negative effects, but we should be careful not to lose our culture and <s>put too much focus on<\/s><span style=\"color:#0b7261; font-weight:700;\">place too much emphasis on<\/span><sup style=\"color:#1b6fd1;\">10<\/sup> appearance.<\/span>\n        <\/p>\n\n        <div style=\"display:grid; grid-template-columns:repeat(2, minmax(0,1fr)); gap:8px; margin-top:12px;\">\n          <div style=\"border-left:4px solid #1b6fd1; background:#eef6ff; border-radius:8px; padding:8px; font-size:13px;\"><strong>1<\/strong> Replace informal repetition with concise \u201cincreasing numbers of\u201d.<\/div>\n          <div style=\"border-left:4px solid #1b6fd1; background:#eef6ff; border-radius:8px; padding:8px; font-size:13px;\"><strong>2<\/strong> Agreement after \u201cone of the \u2026 factors\u201d \u2192 main subject is \u201crise\u2026 is one of\u2026 that <em>makes<\/em>\u201d.<\/div>\n          <div style=\"border-left:4px solid #1b6fd1; background:#eef6ff; border-radius:8px; padding:8px; font-size:13px;\"><strong>3<\/strong> Remove comma after adverb \u201cnow\u201d (no pause needed).<\/div>\n          <div style=\"border-left:4px solid #1b6fd1; background:#eef6ff; border-radius:8px; padding:8px; font-size:13px;\"><strong>4<\/strong> Collocation: \u201cat lower prices\u201d is more natural than \u201cat a cheaper price\u201d.<\/div>\n          <div style=\"border-left:4px solid #1b6fd1; background:#eef6ff; border-radius:8px; padding:8px; font-size:13px;\"><strong>5<\/strong> Avoid redundancy: \u201cIn my opinion, I think\u201d \u2192 choose one.<\/div>\n          <div style=\"border-left:4px solid #1b6fd1; background:#eef6ff; border-radius:8px; padding:8px; font-size:13px;\"><strong>6<\/strong> Keep the set linker phrase intact; earlier comma broke the flow.<\/div>\n          <div style=\"border-left:4px solid #1b6fd1; background:#eef6ff; border-radius:8px; padding:8px; font-size:13px;\"><strong>7<\/strong> Article + comparative adjective: \u201cthe younger generation\u201d.<\/div>\n          <div style=\"border-left:4px solid #1b6fd1; background:#eef6ff; border-radius:8px; padding:8px; font-size:13px;\"><strong>8<\/strong> Replace vague \u201cinside\u201d with precise \u201cin life\u201d.<\/div>\n          <div style=\"border-left:4px solid #1b6fd1; background:#eef6ff; border-radius:8px; padding:8px; font-size:13px;\"><strong>9<\/strong> Progressive aspect fits an ongoing trend.<\/div>\n          <div style=\"border-left:4px solid #1b6fd1; background:#eef6ff; border-radius:8px; padding:8px; font-size:13px;\"><strong>10<\/strong> More formal academic phrase: \u201cplace too much emphasis on\u201d.<\/div>\n        <\/div>\n\n        <div style=\"margin-top:15px; padding:10px; background:#fff9e6; border:1px solid #ffd166; border-radius:8px;\">\n          <h4 style=\"margin:0 0 5px 0; color:#b7791f;\">\u26a1 Quick Wins<\/h4>\n          <ul style=\"margin:0; padding-left:18px; font-size:13px;\">\n            <li>Delete redundancy: \u201cIn my opinion, I think\u201d.<\/li>\n            <li>Use fixed phrases: \u201cthe younger generation\u201d.<\/li>\n            <li>Prefer concise collocations: \u201clower prices\u201d.<\/li>\n            <li>Keep tense consistent for ongoing trends.<\/li>\n            <li>Vary linkers beyond \u201calso\/however\u201d.<\/li>\n          <\/ul>\n        <\/div>\n\n        <p style=\"margin:12px 0 0 0; font-size:13px; color:#607089;\"><em>This section focuses on surface-level grammar, vocabulary, and punctuation. See the scoring sections below for ideas, structure, and development.<\/em><\/p>\n      <\/div>\n\n      <!-- TASK RESPONSE -->\n      <div style=\"border:1px solid #d6e9ff; padding:14px 16px; border-radius:12px; margin-bottom:14px; background:#ffffff;\">\n        <div style=\"font-weight:700; color:#1b6fd1; margin-bottom:8px;\">\ud83c\udfaf Task Response \u2014 Band 7 (Good)<\/div>\n        <p style=\"margin:0;\">You address the prompt directly: causes of global fashion\u2019s influence and an evaluation of its effects. A clear position appears in the introduction and conclusion, and both sides are explored. Development is generally sufficient, e.g., social media exposure and access via global trade. However, some claims would benefit from more specific evidence (e.g., a brief statistic or concrete example of cultural loss\/pressure). <em>Excerpt:<\/em> \u201cThis can increase their confidence and creativity\u201d (assertion without support). One precise example per body paragraph would lift this to the high end of Band 7.<\/p>\n      <\/div>\n\n      <!-- CC -->\n      <div style=\"border:1px solid #d6e9ff; padding:14px 16px; border-radius:12px; margin-bottom:14px; background:#fffefa;\">\n        <div style=\"font-weight:700; color:#1b6fd1; margin-bottom:8px;\">\ud83e\udde9 Coherence &#038; Cohesion \u2014 Band 7 (Good)<\/div>\n        <p style=\"margin:0;\">Paragraphing is clear (intro\u2013two body\u2013conclusion) and ideas progress logically from causes to evaluation. Linkers are accurate but somewhat repetitive (\u201calso\u201d, \u201chowever\u201d). Sentences are mostly well connected, though a few commas disrupt flow (e.g., superfluous comma after \u201cnow\u201d). For polish, vary transitions (\u201cmoreover\u201d, \u201cby contrast\u201d, \u201cas a result\u201d) and use topic sentences that signal argument direction (e.g., \u201cBeyond visibility, global commerce amplifies uptake by reducing prices\u201d).<\/p>\n      <\/div>\n\n      <!-- LR -->\n      <div style=\"border:1px solid #d6e9ff; padding:14px 16px; border-radius:12px; margin-bottom:14px; background:#ffffff;\">\n        <div style=\"font-weight:700; color:#1b6fd1; margin-bottom:8px;\">\ud83d\udd24 Lexical Resource \u2014 Band 7 (Good)<\/div>\n        <p style=\"margin:0;\">Range is adequate with some less-common items (influential, comparison, pressure). Word choice is mostly accurate, but a few phrases are informal or vague (\u201cgood and bad sides\u201d, \u201cinside\u201d). Consider tighter alternatives: <em>advantages \/ drawbacks<\/em>, <em>identity \/ mental well-being<\/em>, <em>amplifies adoption<\/em>, <em>cultural erosion<\/em>. Collocation upgrades: \u201cat lower prices\u201d, \u201cplace emphasis on appearance\u201d. With more precise lexis across the body paragraphs, this could approach Band 8.<\/p>\n      <\/div>\n\n      <!-- GRA -->\n      <div style=\"border:1px solid #c3e6e3; padding:14px 16px; border-radius:12px; margin-bottom:14px; background:#ffffff;\">\n        <div style=\"font-weight:700; color:#0b7261; margin-bottom:8px;\">\u270d\ufe0f Grammatical Range &#038; Accuracy \u2014 Band 6 (high end)<\/div>\n        <p style=\"margin:0 0 6px 0;\">Meaning is consistently clear with some complex structures (relative clauses, concessive linking). Occasional slips in agreement, punctuation and article choice keep this at Band 6. Expand the variety of complex sentences (non-defining clauses, participle phrases) and tighten comma use.<\/p>\n        <p style=\"margin:0 0 6px 0;\"><strong>Original:<\/strong> \u201cThe rise of the internet\u2026 factors that make global fashion so influential.\u201d \u2192 <strong>Corrected:<\/strong> \u201cThe rise\u2026 is one of the factors that <em>makes<\/em> global fashion so influential.\u201d (agreement after \u201cone of the\u201d).<\/p>\n        <p style=\"margin:0;\"><strong>Original:<\/strong> \u201cNow, they can easily watch videos\u2026\u201d \u2192 <strong>Corrected:<\/strong> \u201cNow they can easily watch videos\u2026\u201d (unnecessary comma after adverb).<\/p>\n      <\/div>\n\n      <!-- OVERALL -->\n      <div style=\"border:1px solid #e6eefc; background:#f7faff; padding:12px 14px; border-radius:12px; margin-bottom:16px;\">\n        <div style=\"display:flex; align-items:center; gap:8px; color:#143e86; font-weight:700; margin-bottom:4px;\">Overall<\/div>\n        <div style=\"display:flex; align-items:center; gap:8px;\">\n          <div style=\"background:#1b6fd1; color:#fff; font-size:12px; padding:4px 10px; border-radius:999px;\">Band 7.0<\/div>\n          <div style=\"font-size:12px; color:#607089;\">Solid control and clear development; grammar variety\/precision holds it below Band 8.<\/div>\n        <\/div>\n      <\/div>\n\n      <!-- ACTION PLAN -->\n      <div style=\"border:1px solid #c3e6e3; padding:14px 16px; border-radius:12px; margin-bottom:14px; background:#ffffff;\">\n        <div style=\"font-weight:700; color:#0b7261; margin-bottom:8px;\">\ud83c\udfaf Action Plan<\/div>\n        <p style=\"margin:0;\">\n          1) Add one specific statistic\/example per body paragraph (e.g., a platform or brand illustrating uptake or cultural effects).<br>\n          2) Upgrade two linkers per paragraph (e.g., \u201cmoreover \/ consequently \/ conversely\u201d) and craft sharper topic sentences.<br>\n          3) Grammar polish: practise agreement after \u201cone of the\u2026\u201d, delete superfluous commas, and build one non-defining clause in each paragraph.\n        <\/p>\n      <\/div>\n\n      <!-- ESSAY REWRITE -->\n      <div style=\"border:1px solid #d8efe3; background:#f4fff4; padding:14px 16px; border-radius:12px; margin-bottom:14px;\">\n        <div style=\"display:flex; align-items:center; gap:8px; margin-bottom:6px;\">\n          <div style=\"font-weight:700; color:#0b7261;\">Essay Rewrite (+1.0 Band)<\/div>\n          <div style=\"margin-left:auto; font-size:12px; color:#0b7261; background:#e8fbf0; border:1px solid #c9f4dc; padding:3px 8px; border-radius:999px;\">4 paragraphs \u2022 250\u2013270 words<\/div>\n        <\/div>\n        <p style=\"margin:0; line-height:1.6;\">\n          Global fashion has gained unusual influence over how people dress, largely because styles now travel at the speed of a swipe. I agree that the trend brings both benefits and risks. While it broadens choice and allows individuals to signal identity, it can also sideline local traditions and elevate appearance over well-being.\n          <br><br>\n          First, visibility and access have expanded dramatically. Social platforms circulate outfits worn by celebrities and micro-influencers within hours, and recommendation feeds repeatedly surface similar looks. When a K-pop group showcases coordinated streetwear, for instance, high-street retailers release budget versions within weeks, letting teenagers participate at lower prices. This rapid diffusion supports creativity and gives young people a simple way to belong to a community.\n          <br><br>\n          However, global fashion can flatten cultural variety and intensify social pressure. Imported styles may displace traditional garments that carry meaning\u2014festival dress becomes a costume rather than living culture. In addition, constant comparison online encourages perfectionism. A recent school wellbeing survey in my city reported students felt \u201cjudged\u201d if they repeated outfits during the week, which suggests the trend can feed consumerism rather than self-expression.\n          <br><br>\n          Overall, global fashion is neither wholly positive nor harmful; its impact depends on how we engage with it. Schools and media can promote sustainable habits\u2014repairing clothes, swapping with friends, and valuing design history\u2014so teenagers enjoy variety without abandoning local identity. If we pair wider access with conscious choices, fashion can enrich personal style while keeping culture and wellbeing at the centre.\n        <\/p>\n      <\/div>\n\n      <!-- FINAL WORD -->\n      <div style=\"border:1px solid #bcd4ff; background:#eef6ff; padding:14px 16px; border-radius:12px; margin-bottom:10px;\">\n        <div style=\"font-weight:700; color:#143e86; margin-bottom:6px;\">\ud83d\udcac Final Word<\/div>\n        <p style=\"margin:0;\">You\u2019ve produced a clear, balanced response with logical paragraphing and a steady line of argument. Your strengths are clarity and an ability to weigh benefits against risks. To step up, add one concise example per body paragraph, vary your linkers, and tighten agreement and comma use. Keep your tone formal with precise lexis. 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